Editting with Eratses

[erastes]

The bank stretched a distance along the bank

hmm – perhaps that's because it was a bank?

sat at a table that could seat 20 at least, looking as pale as china.

a china table! delicate!

 

And I have an expanding character – he starts out as

Myles Graham was a little more slight than Jude Middleton,

and then later!

Myles was, as his clothes had hinted, of a broader build than Jude

it must be the good Norfolk air that does it.

Shoot me. please.

Comments

[chris-smith-atr.livejournal.com]

Myles loves pie. On the china table. With eyeballs.

[erastes.livejournal.com]

Myles ate all the pies. And the eyeballs.

[chris-smith-atr.livejournal.com]

I now have a really clear picture of the ever expanding myles -- Horace slughorn with candied eyeballs?

[erastes.livejournal.com]

I will have to advise the cover artist to podge out one of the boys outside the window.

[anteros-lmc.livejournal.com]

Shoot me. please.
No no! I am finding this series highly entertaining :)

Btw if these are first drafts you're editing I am amazed by your coherence. My first drafts are completely incomprehensible!

[erastes.livejournal.com]

That's the embarrassing thing, this is the publisher's copy.

[jenniferkoliver.livejournal.com]

*laughs* Your editing posts are win. :)

[erastes.livejournal.com]

moronitude, that's what it is. :D

[essayel.livejournal.com]

:) I know how Myles feels.

[erastes.livejournal.com]

LOL - me too!

[nagasvoice.livejournal.com]

Country life agrees with Myles?

[erastes.livejournal.com]

Yes, it clearly does. Plus he eats his head off throughout the book...

[suebrownstories.livejournal.com]

You know, this makes me feel so much better. I can't remember what my character looks like in the first place.

[erastes.livejournal.com]

It probably doesn't put me in a good light, but it is fun to share! I'll have to look through the first draft of Standish, I bet there's some real howlers in there.

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

These posts are such fun!